Incidental Poem: A Naive Question About Women's Toiletries
A NAIVE QUESTION ABOUT WOMEN'S TOILETRIES
Oh, what the hell is "shower gel?"
The bottle's French and doesn't tell.
It's creamy-white with hints of taupe,
And has a citrus-floral smell.
I came here in the simple hope
That I could find a bar of soap
There's "rinse," "exfoliant,"... and yet
Is there a thing marked "cleanser?" Nope.
It pumps out in a techno-jet,
And seems to lather up when wet
I'd use it, but I fear as well
That there is something I don't get.
A word to all those folks who sell--
A diagram would serve to quell
My angst, and stop this baffled yell:
Oh, what the hell is shower gel?
Oh, what the hell is "shower gel?"
The bottle's French and doesn't tell.
It's creamy-white with hints of taupe,
And has a citrus-floral smell.
I came here in the simple hope
That I could find a bar of soap
There's "rinse," "exfoliant,"... and yet
Is there a thing marked "cleanser?" Nope.
It pumps out in a techno-jet,
And seems to lather up when wet
I'd use it, but I fear as well
That there is something I don't get.
A word to all those folks who sell--
A diagram would serve to quell
My angst, and stop this baffled yell:
Oh, what the hell is shower gel?
Labels: humor and whimsy, poems
posted by Cowboy Dave Dickerson | 9:07 PM
4 Comments:
I think you're confusing "kvell" and "kvetch".
I am indeed. Helps to look stuff up! Thanks for the note. I'll fix that line.
Shouldn't it be a B rhyme, anyway? Rhyming with "taupe?" Like "mope" or something?
Okay. I changed "Until then hear me kvell" (turns out "kvell" means to boast pridefully) to "and stop my baffled yell," which I don't know why I didn't notice earlier. Yell is perfect.
And Brian--look at the rhyme scheme and you'll see that the off rhyme in every quatrain (the third line) is the main rhyme in the next (lines one, two, and four). So for the last stanza, I simply looped back so that the third line of that one also matched the first, second, and third of the FIRST stanza. It's just that the main rhyme in both stanzas is "ell," so it looks like there's no change. But that's intentional. There were so many "ell" rhymes available I just wanted to keep throwing them at this concept.
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